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madmonk
Rakesh Karmaran
India, Maharashtra, Mumbai

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THAT UNCURABLE MALADY..

My love is abound as endless sky
As your beauty knows realm none,
Had known love’s a truthful lie
Saved the heart to venture alone,

My love is innocent, do not thwart
In eager I await, so you could claim
Loved in all sense, hard to part
As in breath, and in death be same

My love is each breath of my blood
As warm delight flows in rage,
Makes each trickle, storm in flood
As fury of heart, in fumes enrage,

My love is true, if could I prove
With feats of test and endure,
When my breath last, not I move
Grieve not as tears don’t cure

My love shall end, if time does lie
That uncurable malady, it has no antidote
Whether our union is blessed on earth or sky
The books of fate shall declare, the words HE wrote.

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nivipooh Comment by: nivipooh - 2008-01-27 00:45
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"Whether our union is blessed on earth or sky
The books of fate shall declare, the words HE wrote."
I loved this part of the poem, as no matter how truly you love!
finally everything depends on him up there, isn't it?
Lovely poem, thanks for sharing
Comment by: - 2008-01-26 17:20
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I really liked this piece as it’s well written. It has a lot of excellent description and similes.
my favourite part was
“My love is each breath of my blood
As warm delight flows in rage,
Makes each trickle, storm in flood
As fury of heart, in fumes enrage”
phillmag Comment by: phillmag - 2008-01-26 04:24
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i like this, esp. the dialectic of "truthful lie" and the internal rhyme of "true...prove". add a . to the title to complete the elipsis
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