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Comment by: lucy - 2008-05-09 08:23
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| wow... |
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Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-05-06 06:15
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| Yes, you nailed it. That's how it works. We have hot buttons and this guy hit yours. The hot button set off a tape that won't stop playing. We have to reprogram our brains. I wrote a book called On Being a Shit: Unkind Deeds and Cover-Ups in Everyday Life. Sounds like you and this guy fit the book to a t. |
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| This has possibilities definitely but, you might think more about really amplifying the pain in the first section so it isn't so understated. Maybe you should bring in more of the reality of being burned, i.e. dead nerves, scarred flesh--something that pulls the reader in. You called it shithead which signifies to me that there is anger within, but it doesn't seem to come out in your words. |
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| i can feel the passion.. the hurt.. the pain.. a good read.. =) |
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| Yes break ups are never easy but, we all survive some how. |
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