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There is a place I’ve yet to find
Where we can have peace of mind
This is it, anxiety and grind
Mapped and plotted even outlined
Perhaps just wait and bear in mind
We could not like what we may find
Am I right or have I been blind ?
Something tells me it’s all been timed
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(I'm catching up on Reader reading can you tell? lol)
Not sure how I feel about this one. Don't think it's all been timed but then, I don't know. It's got me thinking so, good job on that. Good job on the way it's written too.
Good start. Just a couple of suggestion: punctuation will make your work more readable and if you submit it to a contest, will probably help if it is correct. Remember, these are just suggestions. Janet
peace of mind.
This is it, anxiety and grind
Mapped, plotted even outlined
(this change will bring the rhythm into check with the other lines)
Perhaps just wait and bear in mind
We MIGHT not like what we may find
Am I right or have I been blind? (remove the space before ?)
me it’s all been timed.
