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esknapp
Eric Knapp
United States, NY, Memphis

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Difficulty Swallowing

Facing,
at last,
the damage done
by careless self-indulgence,
and too little expressed concern
for things that matter,
apparently a lot,
to you,
my love,
I’ve brought you here
to the place where we first sat eye-to-eye,
and heart-to –heart,
to chart a mutual course
through
this lone and dreary world
to show my love again,
with violins and flowers;

To make you melt
before a backdrop
of the clink of lovers’ glasses brought together,
sealing dreams,
and fates,
and promises.

But it seems I can’t begin
my prepared speech
while watching
your fevered, restless fingers
crumple and choke
the linen napkin in your lap,
and your wince
when I clank my knife against
my half-empty glass
while rending
my overcooked steak
into pieces small enough to be easily
chewed,
and swallowed.

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KennethWelling Comment by: KennethWelling - 2008-02-15 05:40
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The image with the napkin and fingers is just fantastic. It perfectly captures her mood. Also, I like the transition in this poem. I was getting prepared for something a little sentimental (which would be a surprise from you admittedly), but then you pulled the rug out from under me. Nice work.
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-02-13 23:51
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Nice piece of work Eric...Things can be a little hard to swallow sometimes... Thanks for the read.
mrsspark Comment by: mrsspark - 2008-02-12 11:33
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And a happy Valentine's Day to you! Wish I could offer something a bit more useful, but I just thought this was fantastic. To echo Sophia, what makes it is the way you've brought that clash between the ideal and the reality right into focus. And the way that ideal negates the lover as a person is hammered home so neatly (To make you melt/
before a backdrop...) Slick work. Thanks as always for the read. XX
Sophia Comment by: Sophia - 2008-02-07 03:03
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The last stanza reallt brings this all together and makes this a very affecting piece of writing. The image of the crumpled napkin and the flinching compared with all the romaticised imagery before show clearly the change in the relationship, and the difficulty in trying to go back to how it was.
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