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Simply You
A never ending story,
A song my heart can't seem to complete.
Words that remain cluttered in my head.
A feeling striving to be felt.
The damage one person can cause.
There are millions of words out there,
But none can truly show what's become of me.
You left without a care, left me a naive wreck.
And as i babble and scribble these words,
I realize you're all I need.
Simply you, the one who caused the most hurt,
the one that showed me love.
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Comment by: sickSAM - 2008-02-14 10:49
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| i love reading poems with true emotion. you really put it all out there. you paint a vivid picture of your thoughts. |
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| I agree with the gentlement above me, great work. You must truly care for this person and I apologize if he has hurt you. get better soon, for the time being thanks for the great poem. |
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i love these two line:
"There are millions of words out there,
But none can truly show what's become of me."
The tone of this poem is great.
In the third to last line, I'd make "i" "I."
I would like to know why the speaker needs that person. Otherwise, the poem is great. |
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