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KeepBreathing
Alexzan Burton
United States, Missouri, Springfield

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Future Unwritten

Part the First
`````````````````````````

A glance
Like a lightening bolt across the room.
Lying on the kitchen floor, against the fridge, gazing up
Cheap vodka coursing through
Peach tea's in the fridge...
...in the way, here comes a drunk boy
and...

!watch the fucking door!

He laughs...
what a sound!
So drunk, but he laughs.

Following...
By the car, first kiss
And walk away...
I
Still
Won.

Despite the I-chase-you-you-chase-me-if-you-want-it games
the talking in circles
games
That don't last more
Than ten hours.

Steal a car?
Steal another kiss?

And another...
and another....
and another....

Tastes like cheap vodka
and beer
and
whatever else
rests
on lips.

Goodbye for now.

Note-
Eightbackslashtwentyfivebackslashtwothousandandseven

Two words.
All
Yours.

Part the Second
`````````````````````````

Insecurity.
Blinding insecurity like a hot light shining right in your
Face.

Every glance, every word, every touch
Mistrust.
Like cruel paranoia
It knows how to hurt you
wants to ruin you
Makes you miserable

...strength prevails and
it
doesn't
win.

Part the Third
````````````````````````

Unsure
It's there. Trust has been found...such deep trust.
But it
Hurts
It's so hard
but
So beautiful
So necessary
So
Wanted.

In love.
Like falling ten feet to land right on your face

SMACK!

on your face.
In love.

Ten hours.
Is all
it took
From the first look
to
Between your sheets
then
In love.

Ten days.

Part the Fourth
`````````````````````````

So in love..
It's like
Wow.
Like
Fire, burning, seething
Fire that never dies.
So
in
Love.

Could never want more...
Than your arms....
Kisses
Warmth.

Happiness.
Beyond.
Belief.

never let go.

Part the Fifth
```````````````````````

Future

Unwritten.

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aysmiles Comment by: aysmiles - 2008-04-05 13:04
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Another nice piece, Alexzan. Typical of your sad imaginative creativity. Bless u
Still thinking Comment by: Still thinking Online- 2008-03-14 06:45
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i really like this one
Joey Comment by: Joey - 2008-03-10 10:29
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Wow, you are great at writing about the topics of sex and sex addiction. I relate with your work so easily and quickly, it's like I handed you a list of requirements for this piece and you filled each one just for me. Really good work.
KeepBreathing Comment by: KeepBreathing - 2008-02-23 21:08
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Awesome! I will take advantage of your suggestion, thank you so much. I am glad that you liked it!!
Fireballems Comment by: Fireballems - 2008-02-23 19:17
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love this so much

couple things:
first stanza in part the second: don't write:
"Blinding insecurity like a white hot light shining right in your
Face."
just because "white hot" is cliche and the entire rest of the poem isn't

i just...it's so good and I want to copy all the parts I find extraordinary and put them in this comment, but if I did the comment would fill the page.
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