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Snowslip
My waist pries from your window
sad-colored at the sad streets below.
I dont want to write of winter-
I tire of the metaphors stuck
with no coat or scarf or gloves
to warm the cold- cold- cold.
You are everything delicate
about the ground, you bend to
catch me, a falling slip
from milk-white skies.
But, Our winter dies its earth,
melts us in my palm.
And, I hate to sleep alone--
in a bed so cold- cold- cold
I have noticed before,
but never made the connection,
how I wash your dirty clothes,
try to turn them white
but I can never get them clean
in water so cold- cold- cold.
You smile, a smile
that will be lost in the morning- knowing.
From your window I fly,
an open-mouthed snowflake- knowing
of our cold- cold- cold
I meet the sad streets below,
and away from you I walk
in the cold- cold- cold.
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Comment by: Sophia - 2008-02-26 02:42
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| I know I've commented already, but I keep coming back to this one. I can read it so many times over and it never loses it's power. |
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I agree that the repetition in this poem works. It wouldn't be nearly the same without it. They truly make the poem.
There are some stunning visions here. I feel like I'm watching a movie. You never cease to amaze me.
The first stanza is possibly the saddest stanza you have ever written. I know that you recently said something similar to me...but I just read it again and was struck by an overwhelming feeling of loss and loneliness. You are a master of emotions. |
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Comment by: Dakota - 2008-02-15 14:17
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Beautiful, beguiling, gorgeous, illuminating.
I totally agree with Sophia who does you justice. |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2008-02-13 05:06
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Absolutely beautiful, the repetition of 'cold-cold-cold' really works. The isolated feeling is one I'm sure everyone could relate to, but the way you describe it is unique. I love these lines:
'You are everything delicate
about the ground,'
'Our winter dies its earth,
melts us in my palm.'
I wish you had a book published, I would carry it everywhere. :) |
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