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So we are playing the usual game.
Where I try and dry with the towel
while the puppy eats it.
Fighting sleep he lays wrapped
up like the best sort of
present smelling of Bob Martin shampoo.
Snoring with the label in his mouth.
So I think I'll drink my tea
Next to this warm heavy breathing parcel
and wonder if you could ever better
days like these.
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colindardis' comment on your economy in explantion is a key aspect of your work. I like it because it works my imagination. Sometimes they are like overheard telephone conversations and you have to create the person on the other end and the history end from the emotions implied in the narrator's words. In this you sail closer and closer to the wind, like a jazz drummer. I think poets should do that - so many poems on the internet are far too obvious.
Great opening line, throws the reader right in there. What's nice is that you only give the most necessary details by way of explanation, as if the reader should be already familiar with the scene. Sometimes this works against writers, in being too abstract, but here, it's quite refreshing.
