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Thunderpen
Parris ja Young
United States, Montana, Laughing Lady

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DEAR SARAH

I run the cellist's bow
across a radial spiders web--
colors fall like rainbow gems;
the little spheres jump off
disappear into the grass
leaving spectral trails
to the heart of every dewdrop--
and each length and span
vibrates with its own pitch
into the harmony of the whole.
Mist is a gradient of rain
as dust is of mountains.
I am a gradient of God
just like the coyote,
just like the spider
who speaks an idea, some dream
into two dimensions, or three
fearful symmetry
of portent, doom, or word.

I draw the cellist's bow
across your memory--
across the photo that is always surprised
by camera likenesses--
and love fills my life
like a gradient of live,
falls more finely than mist
to lay on a carpet quiet as clover
just beneath the gems.
I hold you now — just hold you.
Your knees and elbows are healed
and the coolness behind tears is grown warm
and we find comfort and ease.
We have nothing to be sorry about
you and I.
Let us be mindful of colors.
Let us be mindful of dust.

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chrisporter27 Comment by: chrisporter27 - 2008-03-10 10:19
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Very good. I agree with Louise. Those last two lines are spectacular.
Louise Comment by: Louise - 2008-02-22 10:15
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For me this is highly reminiscent of T.S Eliot's work. I was going to isolate bits that appeal to me most but tbh I just simply can't. Your work is as haunting as it is beautiful. The last two lines are fabulous - Wonderful, as always.
aprilmayed Comment by: aprilmayed - 2008-02-16 22:46
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You are such a beautiful writer. I perk up whenever I see you have added something new to your page. You seem to have a close connection to nature. Your writings are always rich with a unique earthly touch. I've been to Montana many times...I can understand where this quality of your writing comes from.
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