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Ani
Ani F
United States, OR, Rogue Valley

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Fraternal Dream Twin

He found me drifting
on a Dream Sea of thoughts
Where I was barely a float with wonderment
of where I might find myself next

He turned, and with a pleading look,
drew me into his deep gaze
Revealing the knowledge of the pain
with which we both seemed to be hexed

He spoke, words spewing forth out upon the water

Please take me away
To the heights of creative freedom,
Where I’ve only visited before
Unleash the binds that tie me
This conventional prison of reason

Pulling away from his drowning gape
I grasped for reality of life around me
I heard the tick tock of my bedside clock
Which calmly reminded me
of structure and what is right;
my real life island, I hadn’t lost sight.

But still shocked at the core of his plea
I splashed away the words, now haphazardly a drift
Why is it this scares me so
Oh, a tiny voice replies
its only mirrors of deep down desires,
one or two that are your own

Ripples push the request further away
Growing distant but still apparent
Insistent and in bold type
His plea rode the wave together, yet not the same

Take us away to the heights
Of creative freedom
Where we’ve only visited before
Unleash the ties that bind us
Undue this conventional prison of reason

An alarm goes off, shrilling
awakening the slumbering one
buried deep and out of practice
Ah yes the right brained me
My fraternal twin of glee

But what blocks us from combining
Is the negativity of society
“conformity is unity, you must not stray.
Nothing will come of dawdling here,
wake up, be only you and all will be true”

Ah wouldn’t it please them so
If I’d stay as is, no conflict displayed
But as I still hear the tone of their warning bells
I’ve already embraced him into my soul
I swallow his words, and emit forth my own

Yes, we will fly to the heights
Of creative freedom
Where we’ve visited before
But this time, we’ll break the ties that bind us
And rid ourselves of societies conventional prison of reason

And thus I silenced the reeling shrill
Of real life’s bell, with a simple slam of my hand
Its time to step forward, greet the day.
Confidence now radiating, I shake off the residue
Of Dream Sea’s waves, now
strengthened, by my fraternal dream twin and me.

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Up the Staircase Comment by: Up the Staircase - 2008-03-23 15:24
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I thought that "slam" worked just fine. It was visual. I think your concept was pretty unique. Keep writing! I'd be curious to find out what other directions your writing will take with the "heights of creative freedom."

Take Care,
Shreyass Comment by: Shreyass - 2008-02-14 18:14
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Hmmm, interesting structure, and the concept of a 'Dream Twin' alter ego. I myself just started writing poetry, but I haven't experimented with such length yet, usually not more than a hundred words. Perhaps words like 'slam' and
'brained' spoil the flow? Just wondering.
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