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Thunderpen
Parris ja Young
United States, Montana, Laughing Lady

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WHERE THE PIED PIPER TOOK THOSE KIDS

Into Unknown Country.

You know what kids really want, don't you? They want a particular unknown country.

They want justice, mercy, discovery, wonder, danger -- or at least opportunity to test their limits. All that is conscious, by and large.

Unconsciously they want an end to evil.

Within themselves.

The rats went into the river.

The rats went into the adults. The mayor, the Hamlin city council.

Wasn't there a single voice? Hank jumps to his feet, "Just a minute! We can't do this! Let's be honest. I'd rather be honest and poor than dishonestly rich."

"I would rather," says someone caught up in this daybreak of honesty, but wise as a serpent, "be honestly rich."

"But this is not honest," Hank should persist.

But you know how it went.

The kids are gone.

The kids are gone.

Kids are liquid and magical. The kids grow. The kids do not prefer dead works to trees. The kids do not prefer form to content.

Kids prefer the river.

And at the river the kids scattered to look at spider webs and elfin thrones. Some drifted downstream. And some drifted back to Hamlin and spent the rest of their days longing for music they can almost remember. Some walked upstream.

And there were a few that walked across the water. Or learned to play the Pipes.

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Comment by: - 2008-02-15 20:12
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Lovely one, Thunderpen. It carries on with a tone of objective, detached nostalgia because we always have to be in awareness that we lost this golden age of infancy. This piece of yours reminds me of my own childhood, in Texas, when spiders used to fascinate me, and then in Rio, when tadpoles had the same effect.
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2008-02-15 01:28
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This ending presupposed familiarity with the children's story The Pied Piper of Hamlin. I wonder how it looks to someone who knows nothing of that tale?
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