A FISTFUL OF CHANGE (Wee #26)
I figure I’m pretty much immune to every common disease currently afflicting mankind. Cold is an adjective; flu is how I visited New York.
See, I valet for a high-end resort. In my time, I’ve shook sneezed hands and steered wheels coated with phlegm, saliva and dusted cocaine. I’ve been sucker punched by an inebriated guest – okay so I’m not immune from everything. Point is, in twelve years I’ve taken only a half-dozen sick days, and those were really just excuses for mini-vacations.
Sure, the tips are good, but my best advice is to watch for drunks. Guys with a Jack-and-Coke in the cup-holder and a woman-for-hire riding shotgun. Posterboys for police checkpoints. They never remember how many bills they’ve left in the glovebox, and if they do, they just end up blaming the woman. Trust me, I bet this Porsche pulling up has exactly what I need tonight...
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-02-21 15:48
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Thanks for the read + comment, Vickie. Cleaned up that comma, as suggested. Good eye!
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Great story, John. Interesting insight into the life. Nice visual of the Jack and Coke with the floozy - makes you feel like he deserves to lose whatever's in the glove compartment.
One teeny thing - "Cold is an adjective[,] flu is how I visited New York." You need a semicolon instead of a comma here. I LOVE this line. |
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Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-02-18 19:26
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Mick - haha, that's niceo of you, man
RJ - no, I'm sure no New Yorker could possibly stoop so low...
Wizzer - they clean, but for a nominal fee of course
Rosie - I was going for a little misdirection on that paragraph, glad it caught ya a little! More glad you enjoyed the piece, though
Thanks for the reads + comments all
happy writings. |
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I love 'flu is how I visited New York'. Great phrase!
This is a good story, John, so I'm not sure why you were so coy about it. I only stumbled in one place: 'watch for drunks' made me think you had to watch out for them - that they might cause trouble, so I had to read the next bit twice. This may well just be me, though.
Otherwise, a great description of the horrors of valeting and the rewards to be had... Thoroughly enjoyable. |
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Comment by: wizzer - 2008-02-17 21:36
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hope they clean it up a bit while they search for anything of value in our car!
excellent read! expecially LOVED the first line
xxx geo |
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