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Karjon's 26; Never Knew
I can honestly say that you had me for a loop. You said things, you promised things and had me ready to drop all that I had here just to fly out and be with you. You had me feeling safe, secure, loved, wanted, worth something.
And then the suspicions began. This emotion scared me - I'd never felt it before. Suspicion turned to disbelief turned to rage turned to tears turned to depression. I wanted to die; I wanted the earth to open up and suck me into its crust and close on me so that I could hide from the fool I made myself to be.
I never knew that another human could be so heartless and cheat on up to five ladies simultaneously. Even now, as I am long gone, you still have three others you're playing with; destroying.
I wish you the life that you deserve.
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| Good write, Sarra, heartfelt and honest. Haven't experienced this but something similar and I very much wanted to hide from the fool I had been. Good job. |
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| Well done. Online dating (which I'm assuming from the "fly out" reference) certainly has its pitfalls - the biggest of which is that you're getting a pig in a poke. |
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Wow. Poor girl. Poor guy, too. Buying stuff for 5 chicks...yikes.
J/k, obviously the girl is the center of this, not him. I feel for her.
Crits:
I do wish
Nobody says i do wish nowadays. Make it i wish.
That will make it 150, which it is not at present.
Very heartfelt. I wish there was more. |
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Comment by: wizzer - 2008-02-17 16:19
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excellent emotion. nasty man. tells it all.could feel and see it all
xxx geo
I never knew that another human could be.....is the word THAT really needed?
Even now, as I am long gone, you still have three others you're playing with; destroying.....sorry ! this feels a weeny bit awkward somehow. is it the AS....could it be 2 sentences?....not sure |
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Reminds me of someone I once knew. this one reads a lot like a letter. Sometimes that's needed for closure.
Good one. |
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