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MsWizard
Alicia Wizard
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United States, WA, Seattle

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First Night

eyes closed
quiet tears sliding,
tightly clenched,
wracked in pain,
hold on tightly…
don’t leave me

solitary whispers
and cries in the dark,
forever’s first respite,
knowing with shattering certainty,
it’s the first night

blood rush roar loud in ears,
gasping breath,
fear panting,
echoes loudly resounding,,
a knee jerk rush of realization,
it’s the first night,
its the first night alone ...
...without you.

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MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-06-28 23:29
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Thank you soul...it was a very sad and hurtful piece to write...and I'm glad, very glad you identified with this...
soul Comment by: soul - 2008-06-28 09:46
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this reminds me of some bad things that i have been through; it's very powerful.
MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-04-04 00:10
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Very nice piece. Like others I had believed it would be heading one place and yet had ended up elsewhere. Such sorrow and loneliness, almost reminding me of someone coming down from a high after having been with someone so long that one night without them seems an eternity. There's something about reading this that pulls my heartstrings. I've read it over five times now. Once again, a very nice piece indeed."

I hadn't seen this comment earlier...I wanted to thank you for it...it made me quietly nostalgic tonight....
Ephemeral Comment by: Ephemeral - 2008-02-28 12:31
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Very nice piece. Like others I had believed it would be heading one place and yet had ended up elsewhere. Such sorrow and loneliness, almost reminding me of someone coming down from a high after having been with someone so long that one night without them seems an eternity. There's something about reading this that pulls my heartstrings. I've read it over five times now. Once again, a very nice piece indeed.
MsWizard Comment by: MsWizard Online- 2008-02-18 18:41
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Thank you all....I do appreciate the comments very much...I like this piece myself and I dont always like everything I write....
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