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colindardis
Colin Dardis
United Kingdom, Country Antrim, Belfast

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So Much, Slow and Old

Waiting for my girlfriend to blow-dry her hair,
I pick up a book of poetry in her parents’ living room.
It is yellowed, a sign of either affection or neglect,
but not worn, fingered through with dog ears and tears,
although a picture will not wear from having eyes laid upon it.

The poems are slow, spoken in the tongue of maturity
where the pace is deliberate, a trawl, a meander of thoughts
and observations: not Proustian, but perhaps of so much
unnecessary detail, it would be hard for the casual reader
to differentiate between the garnish and the meat.

I place a few joints onto my tongue and roll them around
to try out the taste, sampling mustang flavours,
old world spices presented in archaic vernaculars,
lines soaked in gin, pickled in barrels of rum,
a lifetime’s inebriation affecting interpretation.

It is affectation, the cloak of the poet’s world
or the written truth, distilled through age and experience?
In my young mouth, the verse failed to spark,
that promised fire snuff out with the snap of closed pages
and I coughed out the cold whispers of shallow smoke.

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irie Comment by: irie - 2008-04-07 22:51
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i loved this piece.....
attention to detail, descriptive, visual..
whilst reading, one is able to put themselves in the
writers shoes.... I love that about your writing.

random, yes, but I loved it so I thought i would comment...
Irie
Dante Comment by: Dante - 2008-03-22 20:58
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Awe.. the old yellow paged classics. They have a funky smell to them too, huh?

I really enjoyed this poem and the scene which you have created. To me, this was a very visual piece of writing. I can just picture this young writer sampling the classics like aged bourbon - puckering a little, but the end result ever so sweet. Thanks for sharing, Dante.
tsdavallier Comment by: tsdavallier - 2008-03-10 14:40
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This is an awesome piece. The imagery makes me think of how I feel when I stumble onto an old book that captures my attention. =]
wildcalm Comment by: wildcalm - 2008-03-03 15:40
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As usual, Colin, you paint a great picture with rich words and attention to detail! Be interesting to know what it was you were reading (sounds like it could have been one of mine! ;oP).
colindardis Comment by: colindardis - 2008-02-20 12:06
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Mustang is a play on words- the tang of mustiness (echoing the tang of mustard as well I guess). Thanks for the comments both of you!
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