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Audiogeist
Sharon Harriott
United Kingdom, London

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Never Knew: Wee Challenge #26

The letter remained unopened, tucked under the sugar bowl. On returning from her mother’s funeral, Joan had spent the rest of the day dusting, vacuuming and washing; glancing at the manila envelope and wishing its contents positive.

It’d been right to wait so long, she thought. It wasn’t so much out of respect for the mother who’d wiped away tears and helped choose her wedding gown. It was more a question of what if her blood mother had welcomed her into her arms?

Growing up, Joan had had what mattered most: love and support. The thought of her mother’s face on voicing her curiosity gripped her heart. So, she’d kept quiet.

Now, forty years on, here was the envelope, with the letter therein detailing her real mother, and the name she never knew.

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Juan2 Comment by: Juan2 - 2008-02-21 15:57
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Way to pack the plot into such a short! There's hints of mystery and tons of backstory we (readers) have got to fill in for ourselves, and it works wonders. Joan's love for her adopted mother and her uncertainty about her real mother are clear, as is the tough decision she had to make about waiting to open the envelope.

"...glancing at the manila envelope and wishing its contents positive." - as far as I know, semi-colons are to connect two complete sentences, so this may need revising. I could be off, though...

I really like that last line. Sums it all up, ties it into the title, and makes us wonder what's gonna happen next. Enjoyed the read.

happy writings.
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-02-19 03:07
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I can sure relate to this. Quite a story here.

Gee-I gave up a baby girl for adoption when she was three. After her name was changed, etc-and the papers were sealed, I couldn't find her. She e-mailed me and came for a visit right before she turned 38.
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-02-17 22:02
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A good take on the theme and a really good story. I think you have shown the complicated feelings very well. It must be such a powerful pull to want know the name even if there isn't a great desire to know the person.
wizzer Comment by: wizzer Online- 2008-02-17 16:34
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sad /poignant / don't open that envelope until grieving for the real mum is done! well told. thank you for the read
xxx geo
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2008-02-17 14:46
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Thanks for the crits, much appreciated :)
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