The Beach: Challenge # 10, Cinquain
The Beach
Was cold as Ice.
Wind shoved waves in and out.
I walked and thought of him ensconced,
Salty.
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| I liked the wind shoving. It's a good example of how verbs can be the most powerful choice in a line. |
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Comment by: esknapp - 2008-02-28 19:31
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| I particularly like the description, of the wind shoving the waves in the third line - there is aviolence in the cold backdrop to the personal contemplitude that I find poignant. |
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The Beach
(Was) cold as Ice.
//felt maybe..
Wind shoved waves (in and out).
//love to see a potent word for that.
I walked and thought of him ensconced,
Salty.
//ultra cool..
do you use a thesaurus all the time? nobody has all the good words in their head.
ensconse
bury, cache, conceal, cover, curl up, ditch, establish, fix, install, locate, nestle, place, plant, protect, screen, seat, secrete, set, settle, shelter, shield, situate, snuggle up, stash, station, tuck away shrouded blanket, board up, bury, bush up, cache, camouflage, canopy, cap, carpet, cloak, clothe, coat, conceal, cover up, crown, curtain, daub, disguise, dress, eclipse, encase, enclose, enfold, ensconce, enshroud, envelop, hide, hood, house, invest, layer, mantle, mask, obscure, overcast, overlay, overspread, protect, put on, screen, secrete, set on, shade, shield, shroud, stash*, superimpose, superpose, surface, veil
veiled, cloaked...............................cooooool.
some others in there.
thanks.
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Comment by: Cherley - 2008-02-25 19:00
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| I like it. I guess I really, for some reason, liked the last word too. Salty. I guess thinking of him being water logged. |
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Hiya. I kept thinking the salty person was salty from drowning. But that would be too many poems about drowning in one challenge, really, wouldn't it? And I suppose they couldn't be ensconced if they'd drowned.
So I'll stop wittering to say, great imagery. Loved the beach being so cold, and the picture it gave of isolation. |
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