Cinquain - Pretend
Pretend
that all is well,
and live the lie, my friend.
For you, your truth is hard to comp-
rehend.
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Yeah, I get the feeling you did the last line just to be ornery. You always keep it interesting Grae.
BTW, I can't quite make out what you wrote in your picture, but what I can is cracking me up. Does it say "Harry Potter and the Mid-life crisis?" Hah! |
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Nicely done, Grae. I think we need to slip this to the politicians in the USA. But then again, they won't get the message. Thanks for the read.
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This has a song-like quality that I really like, Grae. And it's also got a completeness that's very satisfying - it doesn't read as if you've had to cram the message in, but as though the message was meant to fit into a cinquain!
Although I get the rhymes, I think there might be something in the deliberate split of 'comp-rehend' that I'm missing? If so, please enlighten me! |
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Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-02-21 20:07
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I love it. It's about love, life, comprehension, and awesome. I liked it.
I can relate to this poem, having known many livers of lies. Wow thats got weird connotation.
Umm...crits...none? |
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Comment by: frees340 Online- 2008-02-21 20:07
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I love it. It's about love, life, comprehension, and awesome. I liked it.
I can relate to this poem, having known many livers of lies. Wow thats got weird connotation.
Umm...crits...none? |
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"Meagre Portions"
Offering a small glimpse of some of the words that informal grae - Graeme Sandford - has cobbled together over the years in an attempt to become rich and famous through his writing. Sadly, he is poor and unknown (largely due to his writing).
So, what are you waiting for?
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