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Sweet Angel
He with the golden aura
watched the tumors grow.
At first she seemed fine
The medication must've helped
Surgery does no good for these tumors
They had children together
she working as hard as he
making sure
the offspring had the right foods friends opportunities
though he more than she
took actions to ensure their safety
picking them up when they fell for instance
After a while the medication didn't work
The kids were grown and on their own
They were alone except for three household helpers
He saw she was hardly moving breathing hard
The tumors spread to one eye
she could not see
It didn't matter to him
She was still beautiful
He hovered close night and day
wanting to ensure her comfort
willing her back to life
leaving to eat and take care of himself
then back to his vigil
One morning she was sprawled on her side
The life gone out of her
Then he was alone except for the three helpers
He ate and seemed all right
Two young cousins joined him
They chatted for the first few days
Then he drifted into the background
while they watched him from a distance
not wanting to disturb him
wanting to respect him
Their joy in each other seemed
to make him miss her more
He became uninterested in eating
not moving
One morning they found him dead
in the far corner
of his aquarium
no tumors
no blindness
an intact angel fish
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Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-03-13 15:38
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| Thanks, Phil. I'm glad you liked it. I was really attached to that pair of fish. They were incredible parents, really into it. I had no idea how attached they were to each other. |
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Comment by: phillmag Online- 2008-03-13 15:22
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| what a nice suprise! i really like: the kids were grown and on their own/ they were all alone... |
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Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-02-23 09:42
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| Thanks, Rosie. Yes. The baby fish when first hatched stay on broad leaves of the plants in the tank. They fall and this father and mother would catch them and place them back on the leaf. I will look at the poem again and see how your comments work. Thank you. |
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Oh no - I didn't see that ending coming at all, Jane. It was a very moving poem, though. I only wondered: wouldn't it be them hovering in the background, rather than him, as they didn't want to disturb him, in his grief?
Do fish children fall and need picking up?
Not sure why you've got a full-stop at the end of line 2, then no punctuation. Maybe just delete that one.
Wow - long poem, which absorbed me completely. Good writing! |
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