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Never Knew (Wee Challenge 26)
You never knew…
I listened. At least I did as much as one could possibly handle. I yelled, yes, this is true. I whispered many times as well, though you never heard.
I understood. I understood much more than you would ever realize. I simply expected more. I deserved more, we all did. But I did understand, I just couldn’t condone.
I sympathized. Being there at the end, just you and I seemed unfair. Making the final decision alone seemed unfair. Not so much unfair to me as to you. You deserved better.
I forgave. I know you did the best with what you had. I appreciate the lessons, however difficultly learned. Many had it worse. Thank you.
Just a few things, perhaps…
You never knew.
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| Thank you all for taking the time to read/review. This was a very meaningful piece for me. |
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| Agree with Karl and Nora - very well written, the structure, the emotions, the feeling of defeat, regret, closure. Left me sad and unsettled. Powerful story. |
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| I like the simple two-word sentences leading off each paragraph. It lent this a very neat structure. Well done, Jack. |
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Comment by: Nora Online- 2008-02-20 06:40
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| I really like the structure of this--it's almost poetic. I also like how I feel like I'm peeking into the private depths of a failing relationship, or maybe someone's death after a protracted illness. It feels like a good-bye after trying hard to make things work. The flavor is distinctly bittersweet. I really like this. I feel kind of kicked in the gut. That's a good thing. |
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