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Beastly Playground
Quiet nature melts my eyes
Observing its magical performance
I am mystified in awe
An enchanting forest counsels my soul
With ancient wisdom bathed in bravery
Birth and creation reveal itself
I listen through the hissing shower of leaves
Whispering darkness in the beauty of death
I am animated entity, nameless
Dwarfed by the merciless marrow of nature
Stunned by indiscriminate power
The force wielded by fierce, primitive life
Secrets screaming in stillness
Standing over grave silence,
I am mournful in an enchanted meditation
Sitting atop an eternal orbiting loop
Vivid cycling beauty in a beastly playground
Flowing constant in the backdrop of cloaked metropia
Gaia goddess earth mother PLEASE REMIND ME!
of the undivided love of all things past and present
Unified in the strong, mighty flow
Eternally connected in pure love
with streaming tears I clench your power
and seize the love attached to dearly departed
I wrap the pieces of my heart with silken grace
A gift delivered by the sum of nature's love
Nudged by tenderness, I remember
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not sure you need these lines, they seem too obvious. the rest of the poem i like very much.
Observing its magical performance
I am mystified in awe
An enchanting forest counsels my soul
With ancient wisdom bathed in bravery
Birth and creation reveal itself |
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Comment by: - 2006-02-23 12:58
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| Lovely, well written, and all around beautiful imagery. I espically like the message that this poem sends. However, I do think that you might try to make the poem a little more...powerful? Its lovely, but...I somehow feel that it lacks strength. Its lacks...rythm.... |
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