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Shirine Aouad
Canada, Quebec, Montreal

Words: 90
Access: Public
Comments: 3

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Sand river

I grabbed for the biggest prize
Covered my bases
Retreated, thoughtful and
Uncompromising

One revolution, two
And it is not Earth but I
Who has shifted axis

I see now what I can no longer watch
I strive towards that which I never shared
But the silence of the spectator
Has branded me alien

To tie to me their fading candor,
Only censorship and
A draft of acceptance

Reassuring and disconcerting
Is that I am well-versed
In plastered unconsciousness,
Master of ceremonies

Channeled truth, sincerity
And the graceful shrug, conformity

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LocustsCoatRack Comment by: LocustsCoatRack - 2008-03-04 11:04
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Wow, this is fantastic. Incredibly contemplative. I really look forward to reading more.
sickSAM Comment by: sickSAM - 2008-02-23 08:56
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I like this alot. i've read it several times. I love the sarcasm and contradiction, the 4th paragraph is my favorite.
Mick Comment by: Mick - 2008-02-23 02:27
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Hi Shirine... Love the last line in this.

'And the graceful shrug, conformity'

The piece comes through on many different levels but the last line really hit me.

Well done. :)

Mick. xxx
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