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Self-Portrait
I had hoped to portray
the image of a queen
instead of a beggar,
but I could still
feel the grit
on my upper lip,
caked with the desires
of human behavior
grabbing my mouth
and clenching it tight.
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| This is quite the little gem of a poem. I had forgotten about this one. I was very happy to read it again. I think this should be submitted...somewhere. It's very precise, and yet eloquent at the same time. I also believe this to be a very defining poem for you. It describes a lot about the person you were, and who you sometimes fall back into being. |
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Comment by: phillmag Online- 2008-02-26 05:17
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| stephie, thanks for introducing me to your writing. i echo the other's comments. i too like the short and powerful and the second stanza. thanks for sharing. |
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Comment by: Sophia - 2008-02-26 02:39
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| I agree, this is a wonderful piece of writing, as with all your work! That 2nd stanza really makes this for me, the word 'grit' is exactly right; I can almost feel it myself when I read this. |
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Comment by: sickSAM - 2008-02-23 10:03
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| excellent piece, it has me thinking, and i have so much to say, i love short poems that are this strong and powerfull |
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