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Comment by: Cherley - 2008-06-24 16:53
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| Thank you both so much. Janet I took your suggestion. |
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| darn old time! grr. lol This is so great in it's simplicity, I love it!! |
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Hi Cherley, Love it. Just one thing that might make it read better and fit the first line with the second. You wrote: "It flies and it races,
It’s slow and it paces" I would change the second line to match the first, so:
"It slows and it paces". Congrats on your getting poems published. Good job. Janet |
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Comment by: Cherley - 2008-02-25 07:17
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| Thanks. I appreciate the read. |
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Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-02-25 03:28
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| A very good poem. It is very good whether you are having fun and whether you are having none, for it marches on. Well done! |
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