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Set your laser to stun
I once resided on a planet far far away.
Dantooine was it's name.
A vast expanse of rolling prairie and deep ravines
Flora the shade of pea-green.
But not many trees.
The native tribes were peace-loving souls,
They nodded, spoke strangely then proceeded to
Rip the head off a Voritor lizard.
Although Kangarian as a language can be harder
Than Japanese. I tried and learned to say:
Would you like fries with that?
The wild beasts who roamed are deadly
And peckish any hour of the day.
Huurtons look cute like a dalmation dog but
Stroke one and you'll get your arm bitten off.
I blast 'em all with my E11 rifle.
My swoop bike was my life and so I
Customised it with colours of the Swedish flag.
Cruising the planet, seeing all kind of sights.
The three-headed totum pole and the enchanted lake.
A more beautiful place is yet to be made.
No out-of-town shops eating up profits.
Inhabitants do tend to be self-sufficient.
Go to Corellia if you need entertainment.
Bantha beer flows freely and the Twi'leks dance pretty.
One word of advice if you enter this den:
Watch out! Imperial recruiter, he works 4 'till 10.
Yes, all in all, Dantooine's perfect
And I long to return.
I promised myself in my reincarnation
To pay the rent regular and get some kind of job
Instead of staring blankly into the swirling fog
Trying to write poetry.
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| Really enjoyed the descriptions of a far away land. Really different unique poem. |
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| Different sort of poem, a lot of dialogue. It feels more like what someone would read out rather than the normal abstract nature of a poem. But it still has the feeling of a poem. So, points to you for approaching the poem from an alternate angle |
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| Beautifully tongue in cheek, and refreshing for being so. |
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yep, the SW images were great. i liked it because it was different, too. [Although Kangarian as a language can be harder
Than Japanese. I tried and learned to say:
Would you like fries with that?] --cracked me up! i think that was what Luke feared most! |
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| This piece reads more like a story than a poem. Clever though. |
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Zygote Abstract is an anthology of poetry, written by previously published and unpublished poets. This eclectic group of individuals have produced an audacious and profoundly moving work of written art.
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