We're Not Gonna Pay...[Alien challenge #10]
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We're Not Gonna Pay...[Alien challenge #10]
His dream.
Who knew Broadway
would be it’s longtime home?
Ten years. Final call. Fade to black.
Bye, RENT.
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| These details unfolds well, making the last line strangely emotive for such a short poem. |
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| Tim, Cheryl, Sam, thanks so much for reading. This was a fun challenge. |
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Comment by: sickSAM - 2008-02-26 18:10
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| good entry! reads well. in my opininion, excellent theme |
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Comment by: alien Online- 2008-02-26 14:29
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| I enjoyed that - simple, to the point. Well done :) |
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haha.. fun V.
i loved rent. and CHESS.
(would be) it's longtime friend
//could be more potent.. avoid
'would verb' constructions when possible.
thanks,
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