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Hero (Alien Poetry Challenge #10-CINQUAIN)
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Hero-
Noble soldier
Serving without question.
We await your return. Come home
Brave soul.
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It's a timely piece and I can't really suggest any improvements other than the placing of the punctuation.
I would have made the first 'sentence' start and end thus: "Hero - Noble ... your return."
And then used the last four words as a seperate sentence with a comma after home.
