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damnbeautifullife
i might be struggling more than i even want to know
it could be that i’ve lost more faith in me
in more than i choose to realize, and my mind is like
being in fifth gear and throwing the damn thing in reverse.
and i keep trying to rebuke my own depraved self,
my interrupt[in][ed]finitive-in3moments livinmygmy-damn[beautifu]life self,
(even when i know you don’t no one does deserve this)
that your hand on my dry cheek would Not solve me in a moment,
but that’s where my faith lies right now.
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| Very catchy title. Interesting that you do not capitalize the 'i', perhaps re-enforcing the feelings of inferiority, or perhaps lack of self-worth, that you seem to express in this poem. Interesting line 6, I would like to hear it said because I have difficulty reading it. Your poem seems to be one big riddle. I like the last two lines very much. Knowing that the intimacy would not be the solution to your 'problems' but that it is the only thing that keeps you going at this point in time. Or this is simply what I read into it. Much enjoyed!! |
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