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sychedbyrain
Keely Gerlach
United States, Ok, Claremore

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Ravenous Mind

My mind spins like a web
Netting everything within its vortex
Acquiring more than a mouthful
Unable to regurgitate the parts which are inedible
My mind bleeds a sickness
Fed by the obscene
Entangling within itself when the warm wind blows
Waiting patiently for fortification
Starving, is my mind
But enticing only the most unpalatable of multitude
My mind seeks, tendrils searching
Delving for the sublime venery
Sustenance of flavor
Will only serve my voracious appetite

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wildcalm Comment by: wildcalm - 2008-03-03 15:01
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I liked your use of words - it's very descriptive. Almost spinning or churning.
I kinda get the feeling of someone who wants to learn everything so quickly they almost can't take it all in - information overload!
Only one thing - you've used the word 'inedible' twice - maybe there's another way you'd want to descibe that feeling?
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