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danae
Danae Fitzgerald
Canada, British Columbia, Vancouver

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Existence and life

Are all our lives empty, a dot sublime?
A flash or dash of existential time:
Dimensions and souls, we may refine,
Or end as splattered egos on the ethereal design?

We see, we think and therefore we are,
Relatively able to see the stars wide and far
Imagining everything our minds can dream
The good and the bad: an endless eerie stream

As shivers run up and down our mortal spines,
Whenever ghosts and ghouls are divined.
Some believe in what their senses say,
Some refuse existence that shows the way

No one knows what may lie ahead,
We have to wait, until we are dead
And there’s the rub, the end of thought
When hope and kindness are all we brought.

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lilgoldenray Comment by: lilgoldenray - 2008-05-12 11:56
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:D Niceeee! This had a really laid back air to it. It is sooo very contemplative. I like poems that have me thinking. The first stanza was beautiful. I notice a trend in your writing, all your first stanzas are strong, thats really good. Thnx for the read.
lollipopRob Comment by: lollipopRob - 2008-03-23 22:37
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A struggle of sorts about what life is about and also the after life, I felt and enjoyed this piece very much.
I like the fourth line in the first verse. "or just splattered egos on the ethereal design." this one made me stop and think...I like it.
njschmidt Comment by: njschmidt - 2008-03-23 19:33
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Wow, I'm impressed. I decided to look this one up after your comment for metaphysicalg's "Knowing By Being 2," and I'm glad I did. The rhymes carry well with the beat and make it just an overall enjoyably thought provoking piece; thanks for the read :-).
danae Comment by: danae - 2008-03-10 17:52
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Thanks for pointing out the original problem...
goodmoses Comment by: goodmoses - 2008-03-08 05:23
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I like the new third stanza. It slides into place without conflict.
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