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untoldstoriesx3
Brittney Gress
United States, pa, Middletown

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Crash

The words echo through your head.
You feel the ache throughout your body.
The memories slowly regain themselves,
yet you still cannot completely recall...
Sorrow.
It surrounds your mind, and encloses you..
You feel your breath shorten, your mind races...
What have you done?
Flashbacks in your sleep haunt you.
How is it that you can not remember when conscious, yet your subconscious constantly reminds you?
This will haunt you.





I'm probably going to edit this cause i don't like it as it is, but i can't really focus right now =/ any comments?

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jtlt333 Comment by: jtlt333 - 2008-04-25 09:55
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I think I see where you were trying to take this. Maybe make it a little longer with more details of the crash. The reader understands it is a car wreck, but fails to understand why it happened.
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