The Hero
Danny stared at the clock. Not much time. Sweat glistened on his face. His fingers searched the keys.
In action movies, there were scenes like this. The hero had seconds to defuse a bomb, doubting wire-cutters suspended over a tangle of colored wires. He’d have an eye on the clock while guessing which wire would stop the timer, which would cause detonation.
Better to be the hero than a lesser character, maybe a partner about to retire. Being expendable in films meant a higher chance of being blown off the screen.
And this was real life, not a movie. Like it or not, Danny accepted his expendability. In his line of work, the line between hero and empty desk was chalked on the sidewalk, and it could rain any time. Everyone was replaceable.
Danny’s supervisor whispered, “CEO’s got to run for the airport right now. Do you have the laptop ready or not?” Danny nodded.
Fast service: good reason to not outsource Information Technology. He’d saved IT - for today.
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Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-03-09 12:15
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Excellent - no crits, just enjoyed.
Cheers
Karen |
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Comment by: hp - 2008-03-07 18:35
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| Another killer Kowalski. Some importance in any line of work doesn't go astray. The "line between' line was sheer brilliance. |
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Yep, great story. IT guys are my heroes. I love the same chalk line everyone else does. You just slapped this out, eh? Sigh.
A great read, thanks. |
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Danny stared at the clock. Not much time. Sweat glistened on his face. His fingers searched the keys.
//top notch..
In action movies, there were scenes like this. The hero had seconds to defuse a bomb, doubting wire-cutters suspended over a tangle of colored wires. He’d have an eye on the clock while guessing which wire would stop the timer, which would (cause) detonation.
//more vivid syn for that..
Danny’s supervisor whispered, “CEO’s got to run for the airport right now. Do you have the laptop ready or not?” (Danny nodded.)
//should that start a new para? im really not sure. it would look/sound better as a new para maybe.
peace,
T
Fast service: good reason to not outsource Information Technology. He’d saved IT - for today. |
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'the line between hero and empty desk was chalked on the sidewalk, and it could rain any time' is a brilliant image, Bill. Loved it, and loved the story. Reminds me of one of Decaturboy's endings, hell, it reminded me of nearly all of Jim's endings. That means quality in a catchphrase.
Danny seems to be a bit of a crime thriller film buff. But not quite the nerdy geek boy.
Thanks for the cool read - Grae:) |
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