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Tick, Tock
Tick, tock. Tick, tock.
The clock waits for no one. It does not hesitate for any event. Regardless of size. Regardless of weight. In that sense, every person is exactly the same. Each event identical. Time sees not an individual. It does not care who you are or what you are trying to become. It does not wait for you to bloom, for you to flourish, for you to decide. It moves on. And in that sense, it is unmoving. It cannot change. It will not change.
Tick, tock. Tick, tock.
The clock slows down for no thing. Steady pace. Like a battalion on a war path. Like an asteroid rocketing through space. Newton's first law. The only thing that can slow time is some force. Some power. What can match that of time? What can replace time? Man can stop a pendulum. It makes him feel powerful. But time just laughs. Killing a single mockingbird does not kill all mockingbirds. You will hear them sing in the morning regardless.
Tick, tock. Tick, tock.
The clock speeds up for no place. A second is a second is a second. The geographical disposition makes no difference. You are not an island. No man is. And you especially are not an island outside of time. Not even God is outside of time. He took six days to create the heavens and the earth. You cannot recreate yourself in less time. Or more time. You cannot recreate yourself. You are who you are who you are. And I am where I am where I am. I hear tick, and I wait for tock. I hear tick, and I wait for tock.
What occurs when the tock does not answer back?
Tick... Tick...
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Brad, i loved this immensely. I don't think your writing stimulates my 'cock', partially sincei don't have one, but it does give an influence for me to write more.
The only part that i felt didn't fit quite well since i guess i didn't understand is the mockingbird part. I'm not sure how it applies in the first part of the line. The line after completely relates the mockingbirds back to life and time, but i wasn't sure if killing something relates to time when refering to a whole species.
I truly loved it. I just felt confused on the one small part.
You write beautifully. |
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Your writing stimulates my cock.
.... uncalled for?
Maybe. |
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I love the opening. The sentences grow from single words, (Tick. Tock.) to fragments, (Regardless of size. Regardless of weight. ) I think you could extend this by making the next sentences: "Each person is the same. Each event identical." That would fit the sentences growing progressively, and it would continue the "echo" effect that you have established by repeating the word "reguardless" in two consecutive sentences.
"It moves on. And in that sense, it is unmoving." - Lovely. Just the sort of seeming contradiction that makes your reader do a double-take. You make your argument clearly, and use words as sounds to evoke an emotional and intellectual response from the reader.
Your point about creation, and re-creating yourself, is a little unclear (to me, at least!) You might want to expound that point a little more fully. The ending, however, is superb.
This piece encourages the reader to think on, long after the writing is over. Like a melody that hangs in the air after the musicians have stopped playing, your ponderings on the nature of time invite your readers to engage in ponderings of their own.
Not all your readers will agree with you, but good writing should stimulate debate and yours certainly does that.
Well done. |
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"Regardless of size. Regardless of weight."
These are sentence fragments! I know what you were going for though. You wanted to stop the previous thought so the reader could focus on your point.. that the clock dont give a fuck. If you wanted to though.. maybe try..
"It does not hesitate for any event; Regardless of size or weight."
Again here: "Each event [IS] identical."
I dont know why but my teachers always yelled at me for starting a sentence with 'And,' so im going to yell at you for it. DONT DO IT. :) ex: "And in that sense, it is unmoving."
"Killing a single mockingbird does not kill all mockingbirds. You will hear them sing in the morning regardless." I loved that parallel. It was awesome.
The ending was stellar. I wanted to write in "BOOM IS WHAT YOU HEAR BECAUSE ITS ALL OVER, BITCHES."
Awesome B-Rad. |
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