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The Produce Department
Danny stared at the clock. The hour was almost up, he could not remember half the codes and failure would cost his job. He flushed when he thought about the girls laughing at him. Bitches.
He squinted at the test. All but one of the girls had finished and left the room. He heard them cackling in the stairwell. Harpies.
Danny peered around. The remaining girl smiled.
“What you stuck on?” she asked.
“Uh, zucchini.”
“42.”
“Asparagus?”
“127.”
“Got tangelos?”
“55.”
She told Danny more produce codes and turned in her test. He watched her leave. She looked back; he glanced quickly at the clock, avoiding her eyes.
Danny dashed out the final answers and hurried after her. Her smile, her kindness and her paint-on jeans drew out Danny’s courage. He would talk to her. Outside the door heard the girls on the stairs.
“Are you kidding?”
“Nope. He may be cute, but he’s dumb as a post. I had to give him like twelve of those produce codes.”
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Very creative! Finally, bar codes have been put to truly good use.
I love that he called the girls "harpies." (He can't be that dumb if he read the Odyssey!)
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| ok, twelve it is. Stinkin' AP style brainwashing . . . |
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Comment by: karjon - 2008-03-09 13:22
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Good one, Dylan - and the crits have pretty much been taken care of, except: '12 of those codes' - should be 'twelve' - it's okay writing the number codes in numbers, but this one should be written out.
Thanks for the read.
Cheers
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| Poor guy. Girls can be such bitches. I thought he was quite a jerk, but actually felt sorry for him at the end. Great story. |
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| Oh, the poor guy -it's hard to be young, but he's got to get a better attitude! I liked this story, true to life. A good read. |
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