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fureyaersoy
Fureya Ersoy
United Kingdom, London

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Alice's Wonderland

Flint stones under your feet, on top of the hill.
Watching the astonishing view;
sea of all shades of green,
a tiny church tower among scattered houses in the valley.
Just out of a fairy tale's page.
Actually this is a fairy tale, you are in Alice's Wonderland.
On his way to mad Hatter's tea party,
white rabbit with the pocket watch passing by,
Your tale has neither a beginning nor an ending.
Just the sheer joy of the moment,
shared by two people on a saturday afternoon...

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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2008-03-07 20:52
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Try "green" instead of "greens" , "fairy tale" instead of "fairy tale's page", "the sheer joy" instead of "a sheer joy", "But" instead of "Actually". You might think of deleting the two lines about the white rabbit. I think you're talking about a part of the country I know well and love. It is fairy tale like, quite dizzy in Summer. The locals are somehow unattached to the rest of UK. It was even like that in Roman times. Sussex was thought of as being somewhat loony.
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