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amyp11
Amy P
United States, Kentucky

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BLEED

Stealing glimpses
Through fallen pieces of hair
As I
Intently
Watch
Your every move
Like a lion
Stalking
Its' prey
It's only a matter of time
Before you
Become
The kill


Devouring every word
Falling from your lips
A delightful feeding
Fragments
Of moments lived
You welcome me
Into your world
Unsuspectingly
Not realizing I have
Already
Taken it
From you


Enveloping myself
With the beauty
That lies within your eyes
An idyllic, tortured soul
Begging for release
I wonder
If
When she looks at you
Does she see
What I see?


When the time is right
I'll claim what is mine
Pouring every inch
Of my soul
Into you
Indulging you
with
A beautiful mixture
Of pleasure and pain
Making you bleed
Instinctively
Feeding my need


Nails deep within your flesh
As you whisper my name
Hot breath upon your neck
Come on play my game


Will you bleed for me?

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Wildefriend Comment by: Wildefriend Online- 2008-05-11 15:51
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This is very good. However, you might think about tightening up the end--

Nails deep within your flesh
You whisper my name
Hot breath upon your neck
Play my game

You really don't need the last line in my opinion, because it has been implied that the prey has already given in.

:-)
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