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Rosie Sandler
Rosie Sandler
United Kingdom, Essex

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Riches to Rags

The shadows merged and separated again, huge against the walls of the ballroom. If she didn't leave soon, the magic would fade. She sighed with pleasure as he held her close to his cheek and they danced like one creature amid so many.

Then the clock struck, twelve deliberate chimes, and she stood in rags, surrounded by idiots who pointed, gibbered and sneered.

But he stood square, and, with a nod to the orchestra to snatch up the refrain they'd left to unravel, he danced her into the middle of the floor. Her feet created friction as they waltzed and the threads that hung from her skirt twitched against her bare legs.

'I think I'd like to go home now,' she whispered, as he twirled her past her gawping stepsisters and she, snaking her fingers out of his grip, slipped into the night and ran home, leaving nothing but her pride behind.

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Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-03-16 16:17
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Well, your ear is my command, oh mistress (or summat)!

Thanks, Janet.

Lovely comment, Ash - thank you. Hmm. Is that a challenge about Sleeping Beauty??
ALORS ET TOI Comment by: ALORS ET TOI - 2008-03-15 18:07
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Rosie this is excellent--a highly observant retake on an old tale with exactly the right amount of emphasis. Love to see what you'd do with Sleeping Beauty! 'Gibbered'- isn't that a great word? (Ash19640)
ParchmentPoetry Comment by: ParchmentPoetry - 2008-03-10 19:54
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A new take on an old story. Nice work. Janet
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-03-10 09:18
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I wouldn't say it's more correct, Rosie, it's just what my ear wanted to hear. Apparently, my ear has a mind of its own.
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-03-10 07:05
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Is 'created' more correct, Anna? I'm happy to change it - not being attached in any way to 'caused'. Thanks for the comment!

And Karen: consider 'slowly' dead - it died painfully and slowly (sorry). Cheers for that!
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