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sychedbyrain
Keely Gerlach
United States, Ok, Claremore

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Tempests Wrath

Lightning streaks it's dazzling flash
an instantaneous spark respective.
Thunder proud, yearning, and empty
profoundly grumbles for it's fleeting love.
Selene illuminating their connection in the leaden sky,
lovers coition, only but a brief glimpse in the darkness.
An endless search, through brewing clouds,
reveals a hidden rendezvous.
Coveting Nebula pirouettes, piqued with fury.
Enraged Tempest evokes a formidable attack.
Stretching dangerously towards the empyrean,
as Helios observes the stormy onslaught.
Reduced to hover above the Earth savagely
upheaving everything within it's mortal path.
Dionysos wrote the drama long ago.
Perennially repeating when the tropical wind ascends.
Conducted by Zeus's hand, foreboding ambiance intimately composed.

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RobinE Comment by: RobinE - 2008-03-11 21:13
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I like your idea but it seems to be hidden under a flourish of needlessly big words.

The guts of your poem is there and it pricks emotion, are you brave enough to strip it bare of clutter and just leave the actual rhetoric...?

Robin
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