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Nora
Nora Gruenberg
United States, Illinois

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Wee Challenge 29--Diamonds

Adele hit the stack of tires lining the back wall of her garage, her poor depth perception buffered by galvanized rubber. She entered her kitchen to a stab of acute anxiety, which she attributed to a low vodka level.

Setting her bags on the center island, she clipped to the freezer and withdrew an icy bottle. She didn’t remember finishing the last, but happily opened a new one. She pulled a frosted highball glass from the collection beside a velvet case of loose diamonds and rejoiced in the crackle of Ikon over ice cubes.

Adele sat on a stool and crossed her long legs. Pulling a ruby studded vial from her purse, she shook out a Loritab. She cradled vodka on her tongue for a moment and let the tablet disappear. Then she saw the snapshot across the counter top. She reached to pluck it from the tile surface, grateful for the warmth already exploding in her center.

She and John mugged for their older brother, Roy. They were going to live that life forever: young, rich, beautiful and always together. They were charmed, they were the Black family gems and no one could ever come between them.

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Nora Comment by: Nora - 2008-04-09 07:42
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Hey, Apollo. I picked Ikon because I wanted to have her drinking a snooty Russian vodka that was obscure to at least me. I wanted to have her drinking something I'd never heard of, beyond Belvedere or Ketel One, ya know? So I googled Russian vodkas and liked the name.

The story started with the Silver and Box Wee Challenges. Adele burst into my brain and her troublesome brothers followed right behind her.

As for the novel, I've been sitting and stewing on Delia, not ready to finish her because I have to kill a hot guy in the book, and I hate hotties to die, even in fiction. But it has to happen. As much as I'd love to publish, I really just enjoy the process of writing so much. These challenges give me a fix whenever I need it.

I'm glad you like Adele. I like her, too, that crazy bitch.
Apollo Comment by: Apollo - 2008-04-08 21:51
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Okay I gotta meet this Adele chick... as long as she has a bottle of bourbon somewhere I'm down to party ;) I read the other one 1st is this part of a series your doing? and what happened to the other book you working on? Your like the WEE Challenge Master these days :) I'm not hating...

I'm gonna scroll through your stuff to see if I can figure out where the diamonds came from.

One question, why Ikon? I'm just curious because I always use Maker's Mark for character's that tend to be an extension of myself. Or characters for character's whose lives I secretly wish I had... just wondering if there was anything behind the specificity of the booze. I'm not trying to pry so feel free to tell me to piss off if it's none of my business.

Oh and as usual your writing put me right there, I was in the car when it hit the tires, I threw my bag in the middle of the house and went straight for the booze too... your great!!
chocca2 Comment by: chocca2 - 2008-03-30 04:41
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I missed this challenge but you have done a great job. It is beautifully descriptive, I enjoyed this read!
Up the Staircase Comment by: Up the Staircase - 2008-03-29 19:58
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You are a prime example of how flash fiction should be done. You exude control and precision, and are great with your imagery as well. You are able to combine a very detail-oriented tale with lots of emotion combined. Nice touch. I am on my way to reading more!
GraceyLou Comment by: GraceyLou - 2008-03-23 14:12
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Nora this is very descriptive and written beautifully!
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