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NadiaCrimson
Brittany Wilson
United States, Utah, Kaysville

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Dungeons of Dis pare

Mesmerized by a vision of you.
I should have known, t'would never be true.
A vision of beauty, future looked bright.
Lo, by heartache I look away, I fight.
Thorns tear skin, pain bleeds through.
Washing away each thought of you.
Each smile I fake when seeing thee,
Though gladly I'd die upon bent knee.
Tear this heart open and bleed me dry.
Each tattered memory, an uttered cry.
I watched one peaceful night of sleep,
Lo, in the morning who knew I'd weep?
The smell of thy skin upon me lingers.
Thy warm embrace, slipped through my fingers.
Deep pain within, love no doubt.
Give me the strength to cut it all out.
Lo, I sleep hollow upon shadow and thorn.
Upon crimson roses I lay, tattered and torn.
Dig me a tomb, my sacred place.
The last gleaming vision, Thy sweet face.
Hold me close as this crimson runs dry.
Tears fall upon flesh, thou utters "Why?"
Here I lay upon my grand throne.
Deep within dungeons of dis pare I'm thrown.
-Brittany Wilson

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Comment by: - 2008-03-14 04:24
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Please exaplin to me the use of dis pare. I understand the entymology but, being not all that bright, not the significance.
I like the other piece better though because there is a reference to a silver arrow in it. I always had a thing for Diana because she killed stags with arrows, just as Apollo carried his bow and arrow set around like we carry around cell phones.
This piece does have charm to it, it is almost comfortably elizabethan in influence. I relate to the effort.
Writerofamillion Comment by: Writerofamillion - 2008-03-13 18:40
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That was great i loved it personally lol keep it up
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