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suibhne
Aleki Suibhne
United States, CA, Pomona

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Overexposed

I blearily looked at the sheet next to me. Chris’ spot was taken by Panda, whose cocked head and plastic eyes gazed blankly into the dark.

“OK, so,” I began, shifting onto my shoulder, a little girl about to reveal her deepest secrets. “You’ve got ventricles in the brain. They’re lined by simple cuboidal epithelium.” Panda gave me silent approval. “It’s where the cerebrospinal fluid flows. Once it hits the fourth ventricle, the fluid exits through holes, called foraminae, which introduce it into the subarachnoid space.” Panda remained silent. Presumably I was correct, because he said nothing.

I paused, considering my next recitation of neuroanatomy. In the silence, I fingered Chris’ blue dress shirt, Panda’s and my companion in bed while Chris vacationed in Mexico. I had remained home because my spring break wasn’t for another two weeks. In his absence, I’d become desperate for company and overworked with neurology.

My nose brushed the collar and I inhaled the scent. I giggled, pulling the collar closer as though pulling my lover on top for a romp. Considerately, Panda did not look over; his body remained still against Chris’ pillow while I lost my mind.

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krademacher Comment by: krademacher Online- 2008-03-19 15:51
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Note to self: read this gem on a fresh "morning" mind. Cool one, Aleki. I too liked the highly technical lead up to the mono-syllabic ending.
vlclasby Comment by: vlclasby - 2008-03-16 22:03
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Wonderful little story. Loved the conversation with the stuffed Panda. You created a very vivid scene.
Boonrassi Comment by: Boonrassi - 2008-03-14 08:53
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hi Aleki..
this is a cool little story, love how the brain science contributes to the last 4 words.
which are killer.
thanks so much for playing..
T
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-03-13 20:05
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Ha, ha! Yes I like this one. Great ending, and educational too. :)
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