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Comment by: mitra - 2008-03-21 22:10
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| Sharon, this is great. So subtle in its excution. Lovely images. |
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Comment by: alien Online- 2008-03-20 06:54
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As always, this is brilliant. Your choices of words are outstanding and it really carries its meaning.
The form suits the poem's content. You've done a good job. |
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| Ooh. Like it even more, now! |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2008-03-17 09:18
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| I like the pace of the poem. You describe the situation well. I'm not so in love with the seventh line, though I don't know what you could replace it with. |
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oops.. i forgot, are lines 3 and 6
six syllables? |
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