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bohemianrhapsody
danielle kristensen
United States, nj, trenton

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Guardian Angel

I’m the bad taste in mankind’s mouth
I’m the evil twin nobody bothered to tell you about
It’s the second day of heroin withdrawal
And it’s so hard to stay clean when you can get well with one call
And, my friends try to reach me, try to lend a hand
Too bad a cliché never saved a drowning man
Oh Jesus, how time flies when everything around you withers and dies
With my life in the balance, don’t my charms and talents count for anything, my Lord?

Where is my guardian angel tonight?
She took the night off
Where is my guardian angel tonight?
Her phone’s off the hook
You’re not supposed to leave me while my fingernails turn black, don’t you know?
She's letting you learn for yourself
So my guardian angel won’t be here to help me
Then who is gonna come rescue me?

Cooking up your Candy Man to the tunes of Lou Reed
You think it’s so romantic till your third OD
(We have a code blue)
Matt is back in prison, I’m headed for the next rehab
I feel just like a sucker who’s just been had
IT’S TOO LATE!!

And those A&R guys with their Armani ties
Think they can just dis’ me
Tell me what rock ‘n roll is!!
Well fuck you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Where is my guardian angel tonight?
She took the night off
Where is my guardian angel tonight?
She’s letting you learn for yourself
You’re not supposed to leave me while my fingernails turn black, don’t you know?
Her phone’s off the hook
So my guardian angel won’t be here to save me
Then who is gonna come rescue me?

Half past nine, I feel myself slowly slipping away
No one needs to shed a tear
It’s too late now to say a prayer for me…

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mattarnold Comment by: mattarnold - 2008-03-16 19:21
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powerful poem. certainly an emotional subject that's well handled in the prose.

I think the opening two lines should be paired closer in terms of cadence because they begin so similarly (I'm the bad tast, I'm the evil twin) that they should be matched throughout. The second line seems too long. I'd change "bothered to tell" to "told"

"And it’s so hard to stay clean when you can get well with one call"; that's a good line which says it all.

this part seemed out of place as though it's meaning is only known by the writer and the reader is totally in the dark.
And those A&R guys with their Armani ties
Think they can just dis’ me
Tell me what rock ‘n roll is!!
Well fuck you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I don't read much poetry and have only begun checking it out on this site. This impressed me....m
jgilgun Comment by: jgilgun - 2008-03-16 11:26
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Wow. Powerful. What energy and strong language. You know the angel is always there. We have to figure out how to get through our own fog of hurt and confusion and the angel is waiting.
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