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bounarjaf
Kevin Jernigan
United States, New Mexico

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The Genie

This is what it would be like
to stare out through those eyes made of fire.
Clench your fist and squeeze your will into a weapon.
A body so tall that looking at your feet will take your breath away.
The light of now visible stars will make them dizzy,
will make them close their eyes to the burning
and want to go home.
Your massive heart engine beats.
Plans etch dark rivers along your veins.
Smile like you´ve never smiled before.
Revenge.

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Belle Astell Comment by: Belle Astell - 2008-04-23 10:14
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Very imaginative.
aprilmayed Comment by: aprilmayed - 2008-03-19 12:32
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You have some very interesting ideas in your writing. I can catch your flow pretty easily. Keep writing!
lilgoldenray Comment by: lilgoldenray - 2008-03-18 17:40
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I really liked this... good work... my fav line being..."A body so tall that looking at your feet will take your breath away." wow...
larciero Comment by: larciero - 2008-03-17 10:34
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Wow I love the feel of this. This line jumped out at me,

"Clench your fist and squeeze your will into a weapon." - I think it has so many meanings. Because a clenced fist is a weapon and when we clench our fists it's us restraining our anger or our emotions our firsts are little weapons waiting to explode, waiting for the right word ...

So in short, great poem.

I also really like this line,

"A body so tall that looking at your feet will take your breath away."
Dakota Comment by: Dakota - 2008-03-17 03:45
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Really powerful!
'Your massive heart engine beats.'
TERRIFIC LINE. And eyes made of fire.
So many treats. Really good work.
'Squeeze your will into a weapon...'
Amazing. One for the library.
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