writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
vlclasby
vickie clasby
United States, TN, Franklin

Words: 190
Access: Public
Comments: 8

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Diamonds-Wee Challenge#29

All day she’d been distracted by the shiny trinket on her left hand. She tried not to look at it, tried to ignore the tiny dots of light sprinkled like sugar crystals on the wall whenever the slimmest shaft of sunlight grazed the surface of the sparkling stone. But her eyes wandered from her work as her hand twisted and turned imperceptibly to obtain the maximum potential for brilliance. The flawless diamond in the platinum setting matched the light in her eyes today. For once in her life, Margie felt like a princess.

The whispered remarks from her coworkers at the coat rack, in the coffee room, and at the copier ceased whenever she approached. She’d never mentioned a boyfriend to anyone in the office, not even so much as a lunch date. Plain little Margie, ignored every other day by her work mates, basked in their surreptitious attention. Their curiosity about the sparkling object proved more than they could bear by two o’clock.

“Margie, where’d ya get that giant rock?”

“Humph, wouldn’t you like to know?”

Margie just hoped she could pay for it.

Want to comment on this Flash Fiction?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Flash Fiction and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-03-22 07:20
Add to Readers
      
There needs to be a little mystery about a woman in order to be noticed by co-workers. She just blends in with the furniture if she isn't overly attractive or hasn't an outgoing personality.

Well written.
vlclasby Comment by: vlclasby - 2008-03-19 20:17
Add to Readers
      
Thanks Anna. Glad to say this one isn't rooted in truth.

I took Tim's suggestion and changed 'ever so slightly' to 'imperceptibly.'
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-03-19 20:01
Add to Readers
      
Ha, ha, left me laughing. What a great idea.
Vision79 Comment by: Vision79 - 2008-03-19 17:33
Add to Readers
      
I thought this was beautiful. You have a great imagination. Write on!
Boonrassi Comment by: Boonrassi - 2008-03-17 07:06
Add to Readers
      
hi Vickie,

turned (ever so slightly) to obtain

//you might want a word that means that.
syns for 'minute' or 'small' maybe.

good story with a big punchline.
thanks,
T
1 2 Next

Sponsored Ads


Added to Library of:

By vlclasby

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S