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ausura90
Rachel Ausura
United States, va, newport news

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Standing By

waiting, watching
Why?
must tomorrow always be the day
when the earth's not bare
can't the here and now give birth to bloom?

waiting, watching
Why?
do we sit listening to voices
Tell us we're too young
Tell us one is insignificant

waiting, watching
Why?
do corrupt bones blabber on
"Act like this "
"Think like that"

waiting, watching
Why?
are they like sheep
Always follow
Never think

waiting, watching
Standing By
"one day," we say
while the earth stays dry
and we wonder
Why?

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oliviaiwolf Comment by: oliviaiwolf - 2008-03-17 15:37
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I loved this poem! Your point is so true- it really resonated with me. However, and you may not want to take my advice- I would get of the repetitious waiting, watching, why?- because i think the repetition juvenalizes the poem and takes away from your ultimate message. Good luck!
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