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L J
Louis Harris
South Africa, Gauteng, Germiston

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A Symphony of Diamonds

From the private journals of Lt. Jason Miller: FBI, 1948:

Sir Ronald Fern, a short, rake of a man, relaxed as the DC10 made its way from South Africa to London. I sat beside him and recognised him at once. ‘You’re a conductor, aren’t you? A music conductor. I’ve seen you in the papers.’

‘Fame has a terrible price; recognition.’

I shook his hand. ‘An honour to meet you, sir. I live in the Transvaal. Returning to London to be with the in-laws. Written anything new, lately?’

‘While in South Africa I completed a new work.’

‘What’s it called?’

‘The Diamond Symphony.’

A few hours later the flight landed at Heathrow and I said, ‘Well, it was a great honour meeting and chatting with you, Sir Ronald.’

Sir Ronald laughed, ‘Enjoy your life, young man. Goodbye.’

Sir Ronald swiftly made for the men’s restroom and once inside, closed the door. He removed a wooden baton from his suitcase, bit one end open, and emptied the contents into a black pouch. He flushed the chain and opened the door.

‘Hello again, Sir Ronald.’ I grinned. ‘FBI. Lieutenant Jason Miller. I’d like to talk to you about stolen diamonds.’

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lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-03-19 18:55
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Oooh, enjoyed that, liked it a lot. I love it when the toff gets his comeuppance. Nice tight write, too.
L J Comment by: L J - 2008-03-19 07:10
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Thanks all. This was a fun piece to write - I'm thinking of developing both characters.

Respect
LadyMoon Comment by: LadyMoon Online- 2008-03-19 06:18
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What a pleasant read!

I agree with Tim, it's fun to read.

The ending makes you go, "Gottcha, sucka!" That's my mafia interpretation.

I really enjoyed the tie-ins through out the story that revealed the ending but never gave it away.

Well done!
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2008-03-18 17:13
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Great Title and great ending. You know I love endings with a twist. Gee-I was born in 1948.
Rosie Sandler Comment by: Rosie Sandler - 2008-03-18 14:19
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Very convincing dialogue, Louis. Didn't see the ending coming at all - great twist. So was there a camera in the mensroom, or did they have enough proof already? (No need to answer - just musing there.)

Great characterisation in a short tale - they were walking off the page.
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