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krademacher
Karl Rademacher
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United States, IN, St. John

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Diamonds

The Winchester snapped to the coal miner's shoulder. Smoke and flame belched, sending immigrant strike breakers scrambling back into their dark haven. The report flashed past the mine office, disturbing its patina of dust.

MacDowell smudged blackened sweat from his brow and snatched up the phone.

“Herrin operator.”

“For the love of God, send Sheriff Thaxton up here.” Mac didn’t need to say where. Everyone in Williamson County knew. “They're slaughtering-”

Fury reddened his face. “Morning?”

Chet flinched as the receiver banged down. “Thaxton don’t care, Mac. Heck, even the National Guard turned its back. We’re scabs.”

Mac spied the dark outlines of former friends lurking in the forest. “Yeah, and Mister Lester cowers up in Chicago, issuing high sounding proclamations and pissing away the quarter million he screwed us for. I told that sumbitch strike breaking was suicide.”

Chet winced. “One of them Polish fellers just took a ball in the brisket.”

A young man writhed in agony near an empty train car. Rifle fire shattered the air.

Stillness followed.

Mac looked away. “Welcome to Illinois. Make good money mining black diamonds.”

Chet sighed, hopeful; fearful. “Tomorrow.”

“Maybe for Thaxton, my friend. Not us.”

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draco101 Comment by: draco101 - 2008-04-02 23:52
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great write, but i can't help but feel i jumped in the middle of the story.
larciero Comment by: larciero Online- 2008-03-28 13:45
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Really interesting read ... liked this concept and the language was dead on. I enjoyed it.
Boonrassi Comment by: Boonrassi - 2008-03-20 17:16
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its killer.. like watching a movie.
so.. is this creative non fiction?
creative non fic is cool.
nice job,
T
Informal Grae Comment by: Informal Grae - 2008-03-20 06:02
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Thanks, Karl, a real good read. The dialogue and action were spot on (to my mind) and the first paragraph was excellent. The turnulent history of America shone through and this little snapshot of one moment caught the flavour very well.

No crits, just thanks for an enjoyable read.

Grae:)
lancslass Comment by: lancslass - 2008-03-19 18:16
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A great write, Karl. Tense and totally realistic. Dialogue good, everything.
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