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"She"
To escape the bickering
Her parents indulged in, daily
She wished to run away
Or perhaps marry early?
Proposals poured in
As she grew beautiful,
One day she gave in
To a suitor who looked truthful.
He courted her for six months
And promised her a future
That’ll be always free of
Marital tensions and puncture.
She was young and
She knew not herself
She just wanted to
Escape her parents’ scuffles.
So, one fine day, married were they,
Soon enough a child was on the way,
Worked he hard during the day
And immersed in studies, the nights in dray.
Peace she got,
But at a cost.
Her primes lost
Her nights in empty thoughts.
Alone, and more alone she grew
Had to grip her life, she knew
Decided, education she’ll pursue
And thus began her chapter new.
She read about languages
And studied literatures
She read of world heritages
And also, of their cultures.
Then, she started writing
About Mind and Reason
She was I guess Happy
Now that she had cognition.
Suddenly, out of nowhere
An Artist dared and bared her.
Stripped and shorned her, of her despair
How mercilessly, he never spared her.
He filled all her cracks
And satiated what she lacked
He occupied her hollow spaces
Gripped her tight, in mental embraces.
Oh Friends! Tell her, what she’ll do?
On one side, she has her duty to ensue.
Other hand lies her true Happiness
She knows not, whether to cherish it or devalue.
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Comment by: Walker - 2008-04-08 11:38
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Peace she got,
But at a cost.
-Peace coming at a cost which the buyer bears is security, I think.
Peace, as it is to me, is a place where you rech doing something, and not by paying.
Just two different words.
Secondly, as she has identified, I think she does not need to do anything. For this identifiaction, is perhaps what she was looking for all the while.
The life of man has two aspects, action and reaction.
I think, her action part is over, if she does not wish to open the cycle of action reaction, again.
The reaction, which she deserved all the while, were ultimately achieved. This is a plateau, where a life can be spent.
This is good creation, which instantly creates the scene in front of your eyes, and you find yourself flowing through the story. Loved it |
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Comment by: Dakota - 2008-03-24 04:08
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Really interesting. I wasn't sure at first of the rythming - it seemed forced, or obvious, but I think that's my own problem. It's a story, heart- felt, so who am I to comment on how you express it.
It grew on me, and it made me want to seek out more of your words.
You have some really unusual turns of phrase which I really took to:
'Marital tensions and puncture.'
Wonderful!
and
'He filled all her cracks'
Thank you. x |
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Comment by: raghu - 2008-03-23 10:00
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ohh well said !
regards |
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Raghu
To seek answers is all about life, life long pursuit. Hence, no banality.
Thanks. |
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Comment by: raghu - 2008-03-23 09:48
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ofcourse,whether to put it in clear framework or not is choice of poet.
identification and awakening represent almost same.
The concluding air created by "she" made me think of "dragging feet".
may be poet didnt intend it to be so.
but volume of expressions in ur words is enormous. |
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