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The Wrong Way, Wee Challenge 30
The therapist waited; his pen poised.
The husband pouted; his black-eye throbbed. “Missus lost her mind. There’s nowt wrong wi me.”
The wife billowed; arms crossed, bosom heaved:
“There’s a right way and a wrong way. Him, he clattered through the front door at midnight singing Delilah, fell up the stairs, waved his boxers around belting out the chorus, jumped in bed all beer and belches, limp as a biscuit, thought himself Tarzan. Said: ’Eh, bonny lass, I’ve got a ramrod here, play your cards right -it’s yours.’
“I mean, doctor, what would you have done?”
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Comment by: chocca2 - 2008-03-29 18:04
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| This one got me giggling. A light and fun read. |
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Comment by: Nora - 2008-03-25 19:50
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| Awesome read. I had so much fun with that. At first I wasn't sure about your whole semi-colon thing, but the pattern grew on me. Good times. |
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| Thank you so much, Karen, you are a goldmine of punctuation information. I thought I remembered it could be done, but not quite how. Thank you, thank you... (I did check my books, but isn't there. Guess I need better books!) |
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Comment by: karjon Online- 2008-03-25 14:25
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Hilarious - loved it.
One crit - and I'm happy to be corrected - when you continue dialogue onto a new paragraph (but still have the same speaker, you skip the closing inverted commas at the end of the first paragraph, but use them at the beginning of the next.
Oh - unless that last line us from the husband? Nah - it's not, is it?
Blah, blah, blah...
Thanks for a great laugh.
Cheers
Karen |
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Comment by: jauhar - 2008-03-24 21:58
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I have to agree with every one it's hallirous.
I enjoyed it. |
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